Question

母爱情深，母爱无价。学会感恩，学会回报。某英语网站举办以“My mother”为主题的英语征文活动。请你根据下面表格提供的信息，写一篇短文。

提示：1．短文应包括表格中的全部信息，条理清楚，行文连贯，段落分明。

2．短文中不能出现真实的人名和地名。

3．词数90词左右，开头已给出，不计入总词数。

My mother

We need love. We also need to love. The person I love most is my mother.

Answer

My Mother

We need love. We also need to love. The person I love most is my mother. My mother is 41 years old. She is a woman of medium build with long black hair. She is a history teacher in a middle school. She is good at cooking and be interested in playing volleyball. Her hobby is reading.

She did a lot for me when I was a child. She bought whatever I needed for my study, even though she didn’t have much money. She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend. She cooked delicious and healthy food for me. I am deeply moved by what my mother has done for me.

When I grow up, I will do what I can to make my mother happy. I will find a good job after I graduate from college. I’ll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young. I’ll take her to wonderful sights around China. Most importantly, I will stay with her when I have free time. That’s what she wants most, I think.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们以My mother，我的母亲为题写一篇文章。这是一个记叙人物为话题的作文，是我们比较熟悉的一类。在题目中给出了我们具体的写作提纲，我们可以按照题目的要求，从几个方面来介绍自己的母亲。一是关于母亲的一些基本信息；第二是母亲为自己做的事，以及自己的感受；第三是你将来要为母亲做点什么来回报她。我们需要将这些信息补充完整，使内容更加充实，并且用正确的英语表达出来。通过审题可知，这篇作文我们应主要使用一般时态，其中记叙母亲为自己所做的事情时，需要用一般过去时，因此这一部分要特别注意谓语动词的形式；而表述自己将来为母亲做什么事情的时候，需要用一般将来时。写作时注意准确使用各种时态，同时要注意全文意思是连贯和表达的流畅，多使用好的句型和短语。

【亮点说明】这是一篇优秀的作文。这篇作文分成三个段落，第一段描写了关于母亲的一些基本信息，如年龄、外貌、兴趣爱好等。这一段中作者主要使用了一般现在时态，这里比较好的句式有The person I love most is my mother、She is a woman of medium build with long black hair、She is good at cooking and be interested in playing volleyball。用到了定语从句，介词with，短语be good at 和be interested in等；接下来作者描写的是小时候母亲为自己所做的事情，这一段主要使用了一般过去时态，这部分中主要有一些从句的使用，如She bought whatever I needed for my study, even though she didn’t have much money、I am deeply moved by what my mother has done for m等。这些长句的使用，使文章非常流畅，有节奏。最后作者写了将来他要为母亲做什么，这里使用了一般将来时。这部分中的好的句式有When I grow up, I will do what I can to make my mother happy、Most importantly, I will stay with her when I have free time. That’s what she wants most, I think等。

考点：提纲类作文。