Question

书面表达（10分）

以”How to prevent accidents(如何阻止事故)”为题写一篇小短文.

提示：  Walk on the sidewalk

Cross the street at the crosswalk

Pay attention to the traffic lights

Don’t read while walking

Don’t play with others while walking

Check your bike often

Follow the traffic signs and rules

Always wear a helmet(防护帽)

写作要求：1.字数80词左右    2.作文中用到所给出的句子

Answer

How to Prevent Accidents

With the development of the society, the road is becoming more and more crowded. So we must be careful to prevent accidents. Here is some advice to follow.

First, we should walk on the sidewalk and cross the street at the crosswalk. In this way we can avoid many cars on the road. Second, we should pay attention to the traffic lights. We mustn’t cross the road when the light is red. We should follow the traffic signs and rules. Third, we can’t read and play with others while walking because it is very dangerous. At last, we should check our bike often to see if there is something wrong. Also, we should always wear a helmet when riding bikes.

【解析】

试题分析：这篇短文要求我们以How to Prevent Accidents为题写一篇作文，旨在让我们注意交通安全，防止事故的发生。在题目中给我们列出了一个提纲，即一些防止事故发生的建议，如走人行横道、注意交通灯、遵守交通规则、走路时不能看书或打闹、骑车戴安全帽等。我们可以根据这些提示来组织我们的短文，并且题目要求这些给出的句子在短文中一定要用上，所以我们不能遗漏要点。在这些内容的组织上，我们可以不用按照题目中给出的顺序，按照自己表达的需要，更合理的把这些内容串联起来，使文章意思衔接紧密，表达连贯。通过分析可知，这篇短文应主要使用一般现在时、第一人称来叙述，因此在动词形式上比较简单。但是我们应多使用连词或好的句型，来使文章更有表现力。

【亮点说明】这是一篇优秀的范文。首先作者先点明主题，With the development of the society, the road is becoming more and more crowded. So we must be careful to prevent accidents.，因为道路越来越拥挤了，所以我们要注意防止事故发生；接下来作者另起一段给我们提了一些建议，用first, second这样表示先后顺序的词分成几个层次来表达。这是文章的中心，这一部分中作者并没有完全按照题目中给出的几个句子的顺序来表达，而是根据表达的需要，调整了他们的顺序，这样更加合理。这里作者用到的好的句式有如we should pay attention to the traffic lights. 、We mustn’t cross the road when the light is red.、We should follow the traffic signs and rules、we should check our bike often to see if there is something wrong.等。

考点：提纲类作文。