Question

书面表达

三年的初中生活, 你对自己的表现一定有满意的方面和不满意的方面。假如你是林微，请参照以下提示，给你的学弟学妹们用英语写一篇毕业留言，希望对们有所帮助。

	提示内容	提示词
对自己满意的方面	勤学好问，养成良好的学习习惯；……	work hard, a good habit of
对自己不满意的方面	忙于学习，锻炼身体较少；……	be busy, do less sports
对学弟学妹的建议或希望	乐于助人，积极参加志愿者活动；……	be glad to, volunteer activities

注意：1、参照提示适当发挥；

2、文中不得出现真实的地名、校名、人名；

3、词数80词左右（开头和结尾部分已给出，不计入总词数）。

Dear boys and girls,

I’m Lin Wei. It’s my honor to share what I have got and lost in the past three years. _________

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                                                           Yours，

                                                           Wang Xin

Answer

Dear boys and girls,

It’s my honor to share what I have got and lost in the past three years. I am hard-working and have made great progress. I have developed many good habits of learning. I did well in the exams. However, I have problems, too. I spent more time online and I have become quite weak in my eyesight. What’s more, it’s also a pity that I did less sports because of hard work.

In the future I hope you can understand the saying, “A friend in need is a friend indeed”. So you should be glad to help others if someone is in trouble. I also hope you all can take an active part in some volunteer activities, such as being a volunteer in protecting the environment, in helping disabled children and so on.

Thank you my teachers and schoolmates. Wish my school more beautiful, and my teachers and schoolmates happy life!

Yours,

Linwei

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇给材料作文，本文已经给出了主要写作要点，主要包括三部分的内容。动笔前要先认真阅读要点，然后围绕要点适当发挥。写作中，应注意描述的全面性，尽量将提示的内容利用上；结合材料内容，可知本文主要是第一人称。语言的表述应该符合语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯。适当使用连词，做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

写作亮点：这篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短语，如: work hard,，a good habit of，do well in, because of , take an active part in等等。连接词However, and，What’s more, So等，让本文看起来更加条理清楚，符合逻辑关系。英语谚语的使用“A friend in need is a friend indeed”内容贴合文章的需要，使文章更出彩。

考点：提纲类作文。