Question

假如你叫Jane, 这个暑假你们全家准备出去旅游，就下列内容给旅行社的经理写一封信。

注意：1、字数80词左右，开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数;

2、不得在文中透露自己的真实姓名和学校名称，否则不予评分。

Dear manager,

My whole family want to                                                      

Yours,

Jane

Answer

Dear manager,

My whole family want to have a journey to Dalian during the summer holiday. It will begin on July 10th, and the journey will last for ten days. We will go there by plane. Could you help me book seven air tickets? Then, we want to book a hotel which is not expensive. We need three rooms for seven people, and what’s the most important, the hotel should not be far from the ocean.

We will take a walk along the beach in the morning, and we will go swimming and playing volleyball on the beach after lunch. Besides, my father and I will go surfing and diving into the water in the afternoon. It will be great fun. In the evening, we will eat many different kinds of seafood. It will be an exciting vacation and we will have a good time.

We are looking forward to this journey. Thank you for your helping us.

Yours,

Jane

【解析】试题分析：本篇作文为应用文，要求用英文写一封信，告知旅行社经理关于旅游的主要事项。要求：1．书信应包括图中所有要点，可适当发挥, 并补充相关内容；2．信中不得出现真实的人名、校名等相关信息；3．词数控制在80字左右。（开头和结尾不计入词数）。4．要注意时态运用，表达清楚，语法正确，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，不要出现单词拼写错误。

【写作亮点】：这篇书信要点全面，结构连贯，字数符合要求，成功地完成了写作任务。并准确运用时态，表达清楚，语法正确，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。亮点是表示顺序词的运用，使文章更具条理性，思维清晰，表达清楚，例如It will begin on July 10th,，Then, we want to book a hotel which is not expensive.，Besides, my father and I will go surfing and diving into the water in the afternoon.等。