Question

高考临近，许多家长用金钱，旅游等承诺鼓励孩子努力学习，考上一所好大学。假定你是高三学生李华，请根据所提供的有关信息，给某英文报社写封短信。

内容要点：

1.许多家长用金钱，旅游等承诺鼓励孩子努力学习，考上一所好大学；

 2 可能会导致学生只关注物质奖励，而减少学习乐趣；

 3.一旦获得想要的奖励就失去了学习动力；

 4.你的建议。

 注意：1.不要逐词逐句地翻译。

       2 为使语句连贯，可以适当增加细节。

       3 词数100左右，信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总数。

Dear Editor,

    With the college entrance examiation approaching…

Yours truly,

Li Hua

Answer

Dear Editor,

With the college entrance examiation approaching, many parents try to encourage their children to study hard and be admitted into a famous university. They promise that they will be

rewarded with things such as money, traveling and so on once they achieve the goal.

  However, I don’t think this is a proper way. Firstly, it may lead to the fact that children’s attention will focus on such things instead of the pleasure of studying, Secondly, they may stop working hard as soon as they get what they want.

   I think a wise way is to make us aware of the importance of going to a good university. Besides, we should have much knowledge for our furure. What’s your opinion?

                                                  Yours truly

                                                        Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：本书面表达是一篇提纲类书面表达。第一步：审题。分析题目和提纲可知，这封书信的体裁应该是议论文。论点是“家长用金钱，旅游等承诺鼓励孩子努力学习是不确当的”，陈述要点并说明理由。因文章需要发表自己的意见，故使用第一人称。第二步：构思。文章应该按照“总——分——总”的结构分为三段。考生在写作之前必修认真审题，首先要注意文章的时态。不能根据材料逐字逐句的翻译应该注意句子的衔接，以提高作文的档次。

【亮点说明】文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如encourage sb. to do，be admitted into，achieve the goal，focus on, instead of，as soon as，make sb. aware of；还运用句型with引导的复合结构，同位语从句。并注意了句子的衔接如：once，firstly，secondly，however，besides 等等。

考点：提纲类书面表达