Question

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今年入冬以来，西安的雾霾天气严重地影响了人们的生活，给市民的出行带来不便，甚至影响大家的健康。作为校报的记者，你给校报写一篇稿件，建议同学们行动起来，保护环境。

写作要点： 1.雾霾带来的危害；

2.你的建议；（2-3点）

3.你的希望。

注意：1.短文词数不少于120词；

2.开头部分已写好，不计入总词数；

Recently our city, Xi’an, is often blanketed in heavy smog, which has brought much inconvenience to our transportation and ….

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Answer

Recently our city, Xi’an, is often blanketed in heavy smog, which has brought much inconvenience to our transportation and badly affected our daily life. The heavy haze weather has caused traffic jams and even serious traffic accidents. What’s worse, some people are suffering from symptoms related to smog, such as bad coughs, throat hurts and even lung cancers.

As citizens of our city, we students have responsibility to protect our environment. If possible, we should advise our parents and friends to take advantage of public transport instead of driving private cars. Meanwhile, planting more trees is a good way to purify the polluted air. Of course, prevention measures are vital when we are exposed to the smog weather, for example, wearing anti-smog masks to school and reducing outdoor activities. Only by raising everyone’s environmental awareness can we have a clear blue sky!

I sincerely hope that all the students can work hand in hand to help create clean and beautiful living surroundings.

【解析】

试题分析：考查开放性作文。本文要求你以校报记者的身份写一篇稿件，建议同学们行动起来，保护环境。所以本文使用一般现在时和一、三人称相间的时态。要点：1.背景信息：今年入冬以来，西安的雾霾天气严重地影响了人们的生活，给市民的出行带来不便，甚至影响大家的健康。2.雾霾的危害：导致交通堵塞和事故；人们患上呼吸道疾病；3.你的建议：建议父母亲多使用公共交通少开车；多种树；采取预防措施以抵抗雾霾；4.表达希望：所有人一起努力创造美好家园。建议在写作的时候可以加入一到两句谚语提高文章的层次。

【名师点睛】

这篇范文是难得一见的好文章，最大的亮点在于高级句式的广泛使用，也不显得堆砌。如定语从句which has brought much inconvenience to our....；省略句If possible....；动名词做主语planting more trees is a good way to....；倒装句Only by raising everyone’s environmental awareness can we have a clear blue sky!同时高级词汇使用得也很普遍，如inconvenience、suffer from、responsibility、environmental awareness等等；作者的行文逻辑也很清晰，所用句式很好地与上下文联系在一起。

考点：考查开放性作文