Question

假定你是李华，你校外籍教师Miss Rose常常在课余时间辅导你英语口语，使你在上周学校举行的英语演讲比赛中荣获第一名。为此，你决定写一封感谢信，对Miss Rose的帮助表示真诚的感谢。

注意：1.文章包括上述内容，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

2.词数100左右；

3．信的开头和结尾已为你写好，但不计入总词数。

Dear Miss Rose,

I am writing to you

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I’m looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer

Dear Miss Rose,

I am writing to you to tell you a piece of good news. Last week our school held a Spoken English Competition. I stood out in the competition and won the first place. In my view, all the achievement that I have gained is owed to your help. During your spare time, you often spent so much time in helping me with my spoken English that I made rapid progress. During the competition, I followed your advice on how to behave and how to keep a good state, which led to my success. I’m grateful for your help. Without your help, I couldn’t have won such a prize. I decide that I will make more efforts and try to make grater progress.

I’m looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】试题分析：试题为应用文中的书信写作，试题只给出写作框架，并未给出所有的具体写作细节，为半开放性写作。写好此文，需注意三点：一是写信格式要准确，信的开头已经给出，但切要写好信的结尾。二是要详略得当，本文应重点写的是对Miss Rose的帮助表示真诚的感谢。三要注意适当地增加细节，恰当地使用连接过渡词，以使行文连贯。另外，在写作时要注意时态、语态的合理运用。

【亮点说明】

本文是一篇感谢信，格式正确，内容齐全，结构布局合理，同时句中使用高级句子。In my view, all the achievement that I have gained is owed to your help.定语从句用在句中；you often spent so much time in helping me with my spoken English that I made rapid progress.so---that引导结果状语从句；I followed your advice on how to behave and how to keep a good state, which led to my success.疑问词加动词不定式做介词的宾语，并在句中使用which引导的非限制性定语从句；I decide that I will make more efforts and try to make grater progress.宾语从句和比较级完美结合；另外，In my view, During your spare time, made rapid progress.，During the competition,

Without your help等的运用为文章增色添彩。