Question

假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文，请你修改你同桌写的以下作文。文中共有10处语言错误，每句最多有两处。每处错误仅涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改。

增加：在缺词处加一个漏字符号（∧），并在其下面写出该加的词。

删除：把多余的词用斜线（＼）划掉。

修改：在错的词下划一横线，并在该词下面写出修改后的词。

注意：1.每处错误及其修改均仅限一词。

2.只允许修改10处，多者（从第11处起）不计分。

The first monthly exam which I took as a high school student held at the end of September. Unluckily, I performed poorly in mathematics and chemistry, all of which used to be my strong subject. As a result of, my total test score fell greatly and ranked 400^th in our grade. I feel upset and my mother suggested I spend some time in my hobby—fishing for relaxation. Driving by my mother’s suggestion, I went to a pond on a weekend. There I fished for a whole day but calmed myself down. The joy from fishing successful pushed me out off low spirits.

Answer

The first monthly exam which I took as a high school student∧ held at the end of September. Unluckily, I

that was

performed poorly in mathematics and chemistry, all of which used to be my strong subject. As a result of, my total

both subjects \

test score fell greatly and ranked 400th in our grade. I feel upset and my mother suggested I spend some time in my

felt on

hobby-fishing for relaxation. Driving by my mother’s suggestion, I went to a pond on a weekend. There I fished for a

Driven

whole day but calmed myself down. The joy from fishing successful pushed me out off low spirits.

and successfully

【解析】1.which 改为that。

考查定语从句。The first monthly exam which I took as a high school student∧ held at the end of September。本句中The first monthly exam 是先行词，在定语从句中作I took 的宾语，但先行词被序数词the first修饰。根据定语从句中如果先行词被序数词修饰，关系代词只能用that，不能用which。故which改为that。

2 在held前面加上was。

考查被动语态。我作为一个高中生的第一次月考，在九月底举行。主语是the first monthly exam，与举行hold 是被动关系。故要用被动语态。因为这是主句的谓语动词，不是非谓语，故要加上was，构成 was held 。

3.all改为both。

考查代词。不幸的是我的数学和化学成绩不好，这两项以前都是我的强项。先行词是数学和化学，在从句中作of 的宾语。两者要用both，三者或三者以上的“都”要用all。故要把all改为both。

4.subject 改为subjects。

考查名词单复数。两门功课是复数，故要用复数，即加S。。

5.去掉of。

考察固定搭配。因此，我考试成绩的总分大大下降，在我们的年级中排名第四百。as a result,因此，结果是；as a result of …由于，作为……结果，因为。而且Of 后面必须有宾语。故去掉of。

6.feel改为felt。

考查时态。我（那时）感到非常伤心。整篇文章讲的是过去的事，用的是一般过去时。故把feel 改为felt。

7.in 改为on。

考查固定搭配。spend some time/money in doing sth.或spend some time/money on sth.故要把in改为on. Spend some time on my hobby-fishing for relaxation。

8.Driving 改为Driven。

考查非谓语。Driving by my mother’s suggestion, I went to a pond on a weekend.此句中。Drive 的逻辑主语是I，这两者之间是被动关系，故要用过去分词作状语。在我母亲的建议（驱使）下。我周末去了一个池塘。我是被驱使，故把driving 改为driven。

9.but改为and。

考查连词。我在那里钓了一整天，而且我也平静下来。句子前后不是转折关系，而是并列关系。故but 改为and。

10.successful 改为successfully。

考查副词。成功捕鱼的喜悦使我走出心情低落。Successfully用于修饰动词，不能用形容词。