Question

John was traveling by ship to Europe when a terrible storm came. A great leak was filling the ship with water. No matter how hard the sailors and passengers worked at the pumps, the water was still rising. The ship was sinking fast. There seemed to be no hope. But the captain told them not to give up hope. He said that there was hope so long as the ship remained above water. He promised that if they didn’t give up hope, he would land them safely. The captain’s powerful will moved them all. In the end he did land them safely.

After they landed, John found the captain to show his appreciation. But to his surprise, the captain said to him that he was the boy of 30 years ago who bought a geography book in his bookstore. John suddenly thought of the boy. At that time the boy didn’t have enough money, but he had gone from shop to shop and believed he could get what he wanted. Finally, he made it. Now, it was the same willpower of him that saved the lives of all the passengers.

【写作内容】

在一次课外阅读中，你读上面的故事，决定写篇文章针对“毅力与成功”发表自己的看法。内容要点包括：

1．以约30个词概括故事的内容要点；

2．然后以约120个词就“毅力与成功”这个主题发表你的看法，内容包括：

（1）叙述你或你的同学凭借毅力取得成功的事例；

（2）你认为取得成功，主要是靠毅力还是智力？

【写作要求】

1．你可以使用实例或者其他论证方法支持你的观点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但是不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2．文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

【评分标准】

概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

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Answer

In the story, a captain always insisted on doing something, even when he was a little boy. In one voyage, it was just his willpower that made him save all the passengers’ lives.

The story reminds me of my classmate, Linda. In study, she lagged far behind us, but she did not give up. Instead, she kept a notebook in her pocket, and took it out to read on the bus, at the school gate and in the queue before the dining hall.

Unluckily, her English did not improve much. She took up this challenge and worked even harder. Besides, she kept turning to the teacher for help. Finally she made great progress.

Many elements contribute to success, of which the most important is willpower. A man of strong will never give up before any difficulty, nor does he lose heart whatever happens. So I think willpower is more important than intelligence on the road to success.

【解析】试题分析：根据所给内容，以约30个词概括故事的内容要点，然后针对“毅力与成功”发表自己的看法。认真阅读前面的提示，认清写作要求和提纲之间的关系，然后确定文章的主题、文体、人称和时态。根据所给提纲，列出要点，并以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来。写作时注意时态、语态的合理运用，主次分明，详略得当，语言力求准确、简洁。根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

【亮点说明】

本文符合题目要求，结构布局合理，语言精练，同时使用高级句子。In the story, a captain always insisted on doing something, even when he was a little boy.句中使用when引导的时间状语从句；In one voyage, it was just his willpower that made him save all the passengers’ lives.

句中使用强调句型；Many elements contribute to success, of which the most important is willpower.句中使用非限制性定语从句；A man of strong will never give up before any difficulty, nor does he lose heart whatever happens.部分倒装和让步状语从句；另外，insisted on doing，Instead, Unluckily, Besides的使用为文章增色添彩。