Question

交通规则应该人人遵守。请你根据下表的内容提示，用英语写一篇短文。

1.行人（passer-by）过马路，也不能闯红灯， 妨碍交通，影响车辆的正常行驶

2.容易引发事故，危及他人和自身的安全……（自己设想）

3.对行人闯红灯的处罚措施 批评教育，让其意识到闯红灯的危害

4.当场给予警告并罚款

5.……（自己设想）

注意：1.词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯

参考词汇：jaywalk 乱穿马路

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Answer

Recently we held a class meeting to discuss the problem of passers-by crossing the street while the traffic light is red. As we can see, some passers-by don’t obey traffic rules and jaywalk frequently. This seriously affects drivers and causes accidents to happen, endangering the safety of passers-by and drivers. In a word, jaywalking produces bad effects and does not help develop good social behavior.

It is really a pity to see all this in our society. To deal with the situation, the government has taken some measures. When caught jaywalking, the passers-by are criticized so that they will become aware of the dangers of doing so, or they are fined on the spot. Sometimes the traffic police will report jaywalkers at their workplace and expose them to the public. However, it will take a long time to stop passers-by from jaywalking. We should start from ourselves right now.

【解析】

本篇书面表达是一篇提纲类作文，要求写一篇关于遵守交通规则的短文。

第1步：根据提示可知，本篇为提纲类作文；交通规则应该人人遵守。1.行人过马路，也不能闯红灯， 妨碍交通，影响车辆的正常行驶。2.容易引发事故，危及他人和自身的安全。3.对行人闯红灯的处罚措施 批评教育，让其意识到闯红灯的危害。4.当场给予警告并罚款。时态应为一般现在时。

第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如：passer-by（行人），obey（遵守），traffic rules（交通规则），cross the street（过马路），jaywalk（乱穿马路），effect（影响），measure（措施），criticize（批评），accident（事故），safety （安全），expose（曝光），fine（罚款）及endanger（使……受危害）等。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。

本文内容完整，思路清晰，结构严谨，表达准确。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。

【亮点说明】

范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有In a word（总之），deal with（处理），take measures (采取措施)，aware of（意识到）以及expose sb to（曝光），定语从句使用了“As we can see, some passers-by don’t obey traffic rules and jaywalk frequently.”，状语从句使用了“When caught jaywalking, the passers-by are criticized so that they will become aware of the dangers of doing so, or they are fined on the spot.”，非谓语动词使用了“This seriously affects drivers and causes accidents to happen, endangering the safety of passers-by and drivers.”及“To deal with the situation, the government has taken some measures.”等，而且还使用了“It is really a pity to see all this in our society.”及“However, it will take a long time to stop passers-by from jaywalking.”等高级句式。文章衔接流畅，结构清晰，全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然。