Question

假定你是李华，即将参加下个月在北京举行的"致经典﹣出彩少年"（To Classic﹣Brilliant Youth）英语诵读大赛，已经写好所选古诗词的英文翻译稿，请给外教 Alex 写一封电子邮件．内容包括：

1、简单介绍朗诵会：（内容、目的等）；

2、请外教润色翻译稿；

3、希望 Alex 提供建议．

注意：1、词数 100 左右；

2、可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

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Answer

Dear Alex，

How is everything going？ I'm writing to turn to you for help．

I am to participate in the "To Classic﹣Brilliant Youth" Reading Competition to be held in Beijing next month．Each participant is required to read a Chinese classics in English with a deep understanding． I have finished writing the translation draft，which needs to be polished．Would you be so kind as to do me the favor？ Moreover， it couldn't be better if you could offer me some relevant proposals．Thank you in advance．

Looking forward to your early response．

Yours，

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文, 写一份求助信，请外教Alex帮忙修改翻译稿。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文 求助信

时态：一般现在时和一般将来时

结构：分三部分，第一部分说明写信的目的——需要帮助，第二部分说明需要帮助的原因和事情，第二部分表示感谢并希望能得到答复。

要点：

（1）说明写信目的：寻求外教Alex的帮助。

（2）说明情况：

①告知外教Alex你将参加英语诵读大会（内容、目的等）；

②已经写好所选古诗词的英文翻译稿，对其中的文字没有把握；

③求助的具体事项：想请他帮忙润色，修改，并提出建议。

（3）表达谢意，期盼回复。

第二步：列提纲（重点词汇、短语 ）

turn to sb. for help; participate in ; "To Classic﹣Brilliant Youth" Reading Competition;

participant ; Chinese classics ; the translation draft; polish; make some suggestions

第三步：连词成句

1. I'm writing to turn to you for help．

2.I am to participate in the "To Classic﹣Brilliant Youth" Reading Competition to be held in Beijing next month.

3. Each participant is required to read a Chinese classics in English .

4.The translation draft needs to be polished．

5.Would you be so kind as to do me the favor？

6.I wonder if you could offer me some suggestions．

根据提示和关键词进行遣词造句,适当地运用句型，注意时态和主谓一致问题。

第四步：连句成篇(衔接词)

表示时间顺序： First of all; to begin/start with ,In the beginning

Firstly....Secondly.... Lastly / Finally/ In the end

表示并列或补充关系：what is more; besides ,moreover ,

in addition, as well as；not only…but(also), meanwhile , in the meantime, some...some…others

表示转折对比关系：but , however, although , though , yet , while

on one hand…on the other hand ...,

表示因果关系：because, as , therefore, As a result , as a consequence , consequently , thus

连句成文，运用恰当的衔接词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，使句与句之间逻辑性更强、

段与段之间结构清晰。