Question

假设你是学生会主席李华，你将在学校英文报上刊登一篇以“保护大自然”为主题的文章，文章已写好，写信想请外籍教师Tom帮忙修改润色。

注意:1.词数100左右；

2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Tom,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer

Dear Tom,

I’m writing to ask you for advice, hoping that you can do me a favor.

As you know, our school has held an English writing competition about protecting nature recently, which has appealed to many students to take part in it. I’m keen to write articles, so I has written an article, hoping that the article can be published in the school English newspaper. However, I don’t know how the article is and know where to polish it. Would you please help me polish the article? If you agree, I’ll come to your house at your convenience.

I’d appreciate it if you’d like to offer me a helping hand. Looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生写一封信给外教Tom，请他帮忙修改自己有关“保护大自然”主题的文章，以便在校英文报上刊登。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应以一般现在时为主

结构：总分法

  总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1. 求助事由；

2. 希望得到帮助；

3. 感谢帮助。

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

do sb. a favor；writing competition；appeal to；publish；polish；at sb.’s convenience

第三步：连词成句

1. I’m writing to ask you for advice, hoping that you can do me a favor.

2. As you know, our school has held an English writing competition about protecting nature recently, which has appealed to many students to take part in it.

3. so I has written an article, hoping that the article can be published in the school English newspaper.

4. I don’t know how the article is and know where to polish it.

5. I’ll come to your house at your convenience.

(根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。）

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause(从句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表换一种方式表达：In other words, that is to say,

6.表进行举例说明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陈述事实：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表选择：either…or…，or

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

第五步：润色修改