Question

最近 The Researchers 杂志对 2,000 人进行调查发现，现在的年轻人走路很少，这对于他们的健康不利。现在请你把这个发现写一篇英语短文 ，以提醒身边的人们要重视运动， 关注健康。

短文内容包括：

1. 研究发现：18-24 岁的年轻人中有四分之一平均每天步行不到 5 分钟；

2.  原因：① 很多人把步行少归咎于科技的发展；② 有些年轻人觉得没有人一起散步也是步行少的一个原因；

3. 你的建议。

注意：

1. 词数 120 左右；

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

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Answer

Recently, a magazine called The Researchers conducted a survey among 2,000 people on their walking time. As is shown in the survey, a quarter of young adults aged between 18 and 24 walk no more than 5 minutes on an average day, which is harmful to their health. Many people blame technology development for keeping them from walking while some young people owe the inadequate walking time to the lack of companion to walk with.

To solve such a problem, I suggest that people walk more instead of taking the car or bus all the time. Moreover, it is better for people to have an extra 20-minute walk every day, which is deemed helpful to reducing the risk of many diseases.

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于对调查发现的结果和原因进行说明，进而谈自己的建议。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文写作

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时。

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说。把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

主题句：调查发现，现在的年轻人走路很少，这对于他们的健康不利。

支持句：① 很多人把步行少归咎于科技的发展；

② 有些年轻人觉得没有人一起散步也是步行少的一个原因；

③你的建议。

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

conduct /carry out a survey, on average, be harmful to, owe to,solve the problem, instead of, it’s better for sb. to do, be helpful to

第三步：连词成句

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句

1. Recently, a magazine called The Researchers conducted a survey among 2,000 people on their walking time.

2. A quarter of young adults aged between 18 and 24 walk no more than 5 minutes on an average day.

3. It is harmful to their health.

4. Some young people owe the inadequate walking time to the lack of companion to walk with.

5. I suggest that people walk more instead of taking the car or bus all the time.

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

1. As is shown in the survey, a quarter of young adults aged between 18 and 24 walk no more than 5 minutes on an average day, which is harmful to their health.

2. Many people blame technology development for keeping them from walking while some young people owe the inadequate walking time to the lack of companion to walk with.

3. To solve such a problem, I suggest that people walk more instead of taking the car or bus all the time.

4. Moreover, it is better for people to have an extra 20-minute walk every day, which is deemed helpful to reducing the risk of many diseases.

第五步：润色修改