Question

假定你是你班英语科代表李华，得知许多同学长时间在网上学习英语。就此请你用英语给你班同学发一封电子邮件，内容包括：

1. 陈述长时间在网上学习造成的影响；

2. 你的建议（控制时间，多种形式相结合等）。

注意：

1. 词数100左右；

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

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Answer

Dear classmates,

I’m sorry to learn that many of us have spent too much time learning English on the Internet, which can obviously do harm to our bodies, especially eyesight. Thus, as the representative of English class, I want to offer the following suggestions to you.

First of all, we can limit online study time to thirty minutes a time. Secondly, we should combine various forms of English learning. That’s to say, online English learning should be reasonably combined with offline English learning. In fact, we have a lot of things to do besides staying on the Internet, such as doing some written assignments and relaxing ourselves once in a while.

In short, let’s study together healthily and effectively.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

这是一篇应用文。要求写一封电子邮件给同学们，说明长时间网上学习的影响并提出相关意见。

第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时。

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1. 写出背景信息，自己的得知同学们长时间网上学习，表达自己的意图。

2. 长时间网上学习的影响（do harm to our bodies）

3. 提出建议

1）限制上网时间（limit online study time）

2）结合多种途径学习英语（combine various forms of English learning）

3）做一些其他的事情（do some written assignments and practice spoken English）

第二步：列提纲（重点词组）

do harm to; combined with; In fact; spoken English; once in a while

第三步：连词成句

1. I’m sorry to learn that many of us have spent too much time learning English on the Internet, which can obviously do harm to our bodies, especially eyesight.

2. As the representative of English class, I want to offer some suggestions.

3. We can limit online study time.

4. We should combine various forms of English learning

5. Online English learning should be combined with offline English learning.

6. We have a lot of things to do, such as doing some written assignments and practicing spoken English once in a while.

7. Let’s study together healthily and effectively.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n./doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

第五步：润色修改