Question

71请根据下面提供的信息，简要介绍我国大运河。词数80左右。

◆the longest canal in the world

◆runs from Beijing to Hangzhou

◆covers a distance of nearly 1,800 kilometers

◆joins five rivers including the Yellow River and the Yangtze River

◆built in Ad 605, making the journey from the north to the south more direct

◆still plays an important role in travel today

◆every day, ships go up and down the canal, carrying things between the north and the south

The grand canal

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Answer

The Grand Canal

The Grand Canal is the longest canal in the world. It runs from Beijing to Hangzhou, covering a distance of nearly 1, 800 kilometers and joining five rivers including the Yellow River and the Yangtze River.

The Grand Canal was built in Ad 605, making the journey from the north to the south more direct. It still plays an important role in travel today. Every day, ships go up and down the canal, carrying things between the north and the south.

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，要求考生根据所提供的信息，简要介绍我国的大运河。

第一步：审题

类别：提纲类

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般过去时和一般过去时。

要求：根据所提供的信息，简要的介绍我国的大运河。

第二步:分析提纲

1. the longest canal in the world意为：世界上最长的运河；

2. runs from Beijing to Hangzhou意为：从北京到杭州；

3. covers a distance of nearly 1,800 kilometers意为：全长近1800公里；

4. joins five rivers including the Yellow River and the Yangtze River意为：连接包括黄河和长江在内的五条河流；

5. built in Ad 605, making the journey from the north to the south more direct意为：建于公元605年，使南北旅行更加直接；

6. still plays an important role in travel today意为：在今天的旅游中仍然扮演着重要的角色；

7. every day, ships go up and down the canal, carrying things between the north and the south意为：每天，船只在运河上来来往往，运载着南北之间的货物。

第三步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第四步：润色修改