Question

你校校报英语专栏正在征稿。请你以’I am Very Grateful to My Mom’ 为题，用英语写一篇短文投稿。内容包括以下要点:

1. 简单描述你的母亲；

2. 母亲常为你做的事情(两点)；

3. 你的感概。

注意:

1.词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

I am Very Grateful to My Mom

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Answer

I am Very Grateful to My Mom

My mom is an excellent teacher and kind to her students. She is very beautiful in my heart. She is a middle-aged woman with short hair and thick glasses

Mom works hard and often goes back home very late. Though she is tired, she would cook delicious dishes for me everyday. I remembered that once I was very worried about a quite hard problem from my homework. She helped me in time though she was too tired at night.

I am so thankful to what Mom has done for me. From my mom, I’ve got not only help but also the deep love. Thank you, my dear mom.

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于夹叙夹议的文章，要求考生写一小短篇文章，表达对母亲的感激之情。

第一步：审题

体裁：夹叙夹议

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时和一般过去时。

结构：总分法

   总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1.表达感谢。

2.简单介绍描述你的母亲。

3.列举母亲常常为你做的事情。

4.表达你的感慨。

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

be kind to ;middle-aged woman ; with short hair and thick glasses; works hard ; cook…

for; worried about; in time ; be thankful to ;not only…but also

第三步：连词成句

1. My mom is an excellent teacher and kind to her students.

2. She is a middle-aged woman with short hair and thick glasses.

3. Mom works hard and often goes back home very late.

4. she would cook delicious dishes for me everyday.

5. I remembered that once I was very worried about a quite hard problem from my homework.

6. I am so thankful to what Mom has done for me.

7. I’ve got not only help but also the deep love.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although/though+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

第五步：润色修改